[RSWC] A Locked Door

POST APOCALYPSE

(David is heading back from a foraging mission in town where he and Susan had become separated, and walks into a cave to an alcove where the entrance is blocked by a giant metal door. It is late in the day some clouds indicate a coming storm. Nature has taken hold this late in summer the trees are full with no hint of coming autumn. David is getting increasingly frustrated. He is trying to press a series of buttons on a number of panels with no success of gaining entry. He bangs repeatedly on the door and begins shouting.)


DAVID:
Hello! Can anyone hear me? It’s David! I’m back! Hello?
(PAUSE)

DAVID:
Hello! Please! Someone please answer! Has Susan come back? We need to send a search party. It’ll be getting dark soon and we don’t know how many of them might be in the woods. There’s no power out here, but I have flashlights along with all those supplies in the back of the truck. It’s getting dark, is there-

SUSAN:
Go away, David. Just go away.

DAVID:
Susan? Susan! Thank God! Let me in honey! The tester out here is powered down but I swear I haven’t been bitten or exposed. Just let me in babe and I’ll let one of those government docs clear me! Where were you? Where did you go off to? I came back as soon as I could to get some of these snotty government jerks to help find you. Oh babe, I’m so glad you’re back! The truck is loaded with the gear we noticed from that superstore along the highway. Just open up Susan, and we can start unloading it.

SUSAN:
David? Please go away. Just turn around and leave. Go now. Please go away.

DAVID:
Susan? Susan! What in the hell are you saying?

SUSAN:
I left my backpack and weapons and a few small things for you to take with you. It’ll see you through until you can find more supplies. It’s beneath the big pine right outside the entrance off the footpath. Please take it with you.

DAVID:
What’s going on here, Susan? This isn’t funny. I haven’t been bitten and it’s getting dark and cold out here. In a while it won’t be safe out here.

SUSAN:
It’s not safe in here anymore. This government facility just isn’t safe. Go back. Remember that week we spent outside of Billings? That cabin was stocked and probably still is. It had that lake nearby so you could catch plenty of fish. You love to fish. Just go back. Go back now.
Go away.

DAVID:
Have those government bastards been talking to you? Is this what is going on? We both agreed that they couldn’t be trusted since they started this damned plague, but if they were going to shelter us, then yeah, we’d trade some freedom for safety and security. Is that how they bought you off? Is that why you’re betraying me?
Come on Susan, we’ve survived the friggin zombie apocalypse! We’ve made it! We’re survivors! Why are you betraying me?

SUSAN:
My love, I’m not betraying you. I love you.

DAVID:
Then please open the door. Nothing has followed me. I’m perfectly safe.

SUSAN:
I can’t open the door, David. I do believe you, dear. I do.
(Susan starts sobbing)

DAVID:
Then let me in! I keep telling you I haven’t been exposed. I haven’t been bitten. Let me in and we can leave together! We can be together.

SUSAN:
I’m staying David. I’ve disabled the power to the door. I’ve sealed the entire complex. I’ve initiated a lockdown and have silenced the alarms so they don’t know it yet.

DAVID:
Susan! Why? Let me in at least! We can fix this! We’ll just apologize. We’ll say we’re sorry. We can be together it doesn’t matter under what rule, or who is in charge. We can get through this together! Just let me in darling. Let me in and I’ll show you that I haven’t been bitten.

SUSAN:
Oh David,-

DAVID:
Susan, I haven’t been exposed!

SUSAN:
Oh sweetheart. . .

DAVID:
I haven’t been bitten!

SUSAN:
But baby, I have.


(We see David fall to the ground in front of the metal door. He places a hand against the cold hard surface and whispers a few words. He lowers his head and cries for a while. After a while, he finally gets up and slowly walks away.
He sets off towards a distant cabin outside of Billings, Montana. Hopefully stilled stocked with supplies.)

END

Author’s note; the scene takes place in one setting. In it, I try to convey love, life, loss, revenge in a single moment. This is new to me so forgive any errors. Thanks goes out to Tenth and Heff who have posted numerous examples to work from. I hope I do the writer’s forum proud.

Nicely done, but short. I think it's gonna take a few tries to get this format right. SnF.

I'm working on another. Not satisfied with my first attempt.

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Yeah, the time thing dogged me. I hope that I made the cut!

Thanks for reading it!

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Nicely done . Kept hearing U2`s One being played softly in the background , while reading this. I added my own mood music to it.

S&F

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I really enjoyed this one although I knew all along that she had been bitten. Now I need to read more of David and of Susan as they progress into their uncertain futures.

You did a great job on this one. One of the worst case scenarios for a post apocalyptic world.

Originally posted by sonnny1
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Nicely done . Kept hearing U2`s One being played softly in the background , while reading this. I added my own mood music to it.

S&F

Nice tune to it!

Thanks for reading it!

Originally posted by antar
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I really enjoyed this one although I knew all along that she had been bitten. Now I need to read more of David and of Susan as they progress into their uncertain futures.

You did a great job on this one. One of the worst case scenarios for a post apocalyptic world.

Yeah, kinda obvious. I wanted to stress the relationship, though. Thank you for reading it.

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You have a gift for writing Beezzer.

I enjoyed it very much.

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Beezer, your story drew me in but I made it out.

Would love to read more of your work.

Originally posted by sonnny1
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You have a gift for writing Beezzer.

I enjoyed it very much.

Thank you. Always appreciated.

Originally posted by Weremom
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Beezer, your story drew me in but I made it out.

Would love to read more of your work.

Thanks for taking the time to read it.

Your very good at evoking emotion Beezzer. Heartbreaking scenario.

Originally posted by Iamschist
Your very good at evoking emotion Beezzer. Heartbreaking scenario.

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Thank you. Was actually what I was going for!

NOT FAIR!

I woulda broke that damn door down.

**cries**

Very good.

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Thank you!