Your Daily Haiku (Open to everyone)

To follow on from the work of now left/banned member 'whaaa' I'm starting a new daily haiku thread which unlike the one in collab' writing is open to everyone whether you win a writing competition or not

so I'll kick things off in next post, as whaa's rules were, its the thought that counts, don't be too bothered by tradition & structure unless you want to.. again, its the thought that counts.

be real. be creative. get into it.

Peace,
-TF

(link to original and ongoing but 'exclusive' thread - www.abovetopsecret.com...)

reply to post by ThoughtForms


Phoenix rise up high,
Surveys the corpses of old,
Too honest... too bold.

Above Top Secret.
Much too much conspiricy.
Use your common sense.

reply to post by ThoughtForms


Writing sparks wonders
A sight as bright as thunder
Then torn asunder

reply to post by IEtherianSoul9


exploded ether
trail upon remnant bodies
collected by Sol

reply to post by ThoughtForms


Marxist December idiocies
fall like gentle snow on everyone
leaving such fluffy straight-jackets.

Burt mind biscuits
Just apply plenty gravey
All is well

War never done
The public bending over
Accepting death

Dearest chicken vindaloo
you complete me
until my anus burns.

I thought it was 5/7/5

The O.P. is Whaaa
Back from the banning to stay
Oh good happy day

reply to post by Domo1


Domo loves cats
Turn him down, become a hat
Lipstick evident

Fire speeds the process
Separation must occur
To get pure essence

reply to post by flipflops


you burnt my biscuit?
thats ok I forgive you
merry christmas bud!

reply to post by Domo1


the op is not whaaa I'm sorry to dissapoint.. I would love to see him reappear tho

yup pretty sure its 5/7/5

really happy to see all the posts guys, its cool to see how many are willing to be creative & enjoy it when they don't have a bunch of red tape to get through first...

keep em coming guys

When do I get writer under my handle?


edit: Better make it a haiku...

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Contribute written content
Member now Writer?

reply to post by ThrowCatsAtCacti


gotta win a comp for that this time...I'm guessing that means about 3 people a month could join..

if you love writing you'll do it anyway

Peace,
-TF

The Japanese haiku and the English language haiku have several critical differences. In Japanese the haiku is composed of 17 sound units divided into three parts - one with 5 units, one with 7 units and another with 5 units . Since sound units are much shorter than English syllables, it has been found that following the Japanese example results in a much longer poem. The Japanese write their haiku in one line, in order see to clearly the parts of the haiku. In English each part is given a line. This allows the reader time to form an image in the mind before the eyes go back to the left margin for more words. The line breaks also act as a type of punctuation.
The kigo, or season word, is a vital part of the Japanese haiku, but in English it is often ignored and not well understood. Therefore, a great number of English haiku do not have a season word and yet are considered to be haiku. The Japanese, because of their longer history of reading haiku, understand that there are two parts to the poem. In English these are called the phrase and fragment. One line is the fragment and the other two lines combine grammatically to become the phrase. Without this combining the two lines together the haiku will sound ‘choppy’ as the voice drops at the end of each line.

reply to post by okamitengu


that was interesting & I learnt something...now write a haiku

-TF

Old Kim had died
The starving peasants they have cried
One moron falls and two take his place
Large kaboom seen from Tokyo

Forgot what to write
Oh wait, now i remember
No, still can't recall