The Battle Part 1 and the end

Originally posted by dreamrebel
I just didnt know because thier bodies were piled up at the feet of the regrouping enemy and I thought they may be regrouping by thier own dead..

The story was intended to be a bit confusing, I was trying to express the total chaos and carnage of battle I want to rewrite it into a longer story some day about a group of mountian Clans fighting to keep their independence from a quickly encroching "civilization"

Kind of like the Scottish battles with the English or the American Indian Wars or Civil War.

Thanks Dreamrebel and Worldwatcher for your reactions I am glad you liked it, and thanks to all the rest of you for your support.

Carnage well told. Kinda eerie. Nice job Amuk. Thanks.

Amuk

That was seriously excellent! Totally loved it

You should really keep on writing when you some more free time and I hope your son win or get a high rank in the tournament. I'm sure he's well trained.

That held me from the beginning. Perfect ending too.

Great! Now you got me wanting to go out and buy an axe.

I want to again thank everyone for their kind words on my first attempt at a story. I have a couple others I am working on, one of which is pretty short, I will try to post them as soon as I can.

I also want to think everyone for their encourgement for my son, we will be heading for his SECOND Arkansas State Championship in a few months.

And I think God that so far in the battles he fights the winner and the loser both go home that night.

Interesting ending Kinda creepy with the bloodlust. But an interesting read.

I thought I would bump this back up for those who havent read it because this is the first two parts and here is the last

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