posted on Jul, 9 2008 @ 11:12 AM
Next, he embedded a knife "deep" in his shoulder. It was stuck so deep, he went for his axe instead. Yet, the creature rolled onto his back. How?
There is I would guess a bit of blade and the handle of a knife protruding from it's shoulder. Unless he strike it very oddly, and it was sticking
straight up instead of out his shoulder blade, which is what I gathered from where he was striking him (back, neck, as it was on its front).
Dan said "here the being knew it was dead. i was I admit in a murderous rage by this point, and it knew it." Why would he say this? How in the
world would Dan know the creature was thinking this? He has fish eyes for one. I don't know about you, but I can't tell what a fish is thinking by
how it looks. In fact, one of his eyes had "exploded." So why did he say this? It's almost, like several points of the story, like it was added
for dramatic effect. Why do that? Unless of course, it's just a story, made to impress. That's the sort of comment that again, doesn't make
sense, unless it's just a dramatic flair.
The creature tried to "reach the doorway." Again, makes little sense to me. I doubt it came in through the door, why would it try to escape
through a door? Another little comment that would make sense if it were a person, but doesn't make much sense if it's an alien. A comment added
for effect more than anything.
4. Dramatic flair, and inconsistencies: "It opend both palms, held its hands open palm up, and then just started to wobble and fade in and out..."
Another comment that is made for effect. I write, and one thing you do as a writer (I write fantasy), is sometimes use a physical motion to give
credence to a magical or otherwordly action. To me at least, this was just a way to spice up or give dramatic effect to the wobbling out. That's
something I'd write in a book. In fact, I've read that very specific effect (holding palms up or outwards) in fantasy books more than once. One
more attempt to try and give the story dramatic flair, and try to make it more believable. He does that several times in the story. And I call it a
story, because that is how it is written—as if he was writing a story, not telling an experience.
Dan said: "This thing took it and more... it really was going to get an axe embedded in its head had it not decided to electrocute me." That
isn't consistant with his story. He didn't get an axe because he was wobbling out. He didn't electrocute him, he only received a shock when he
jumped on him.
The number of blows is another inconsistancy. If Dan was being questioned by the police for a crime, and his story was as inconsistant as this one,
he'd be doing 20 to life. He went from giving it around 35 blows I guess (the ones over the bed, and then the 30 after tossed a knife), to "over
100." It's like a fish story really (no pun intended), the 35 blows turning into over 100, as Dan progressed in his post.