OMNI A.I.2019

a reply to: Lumenari

So what is your natural language? You write English perfectly BTW!

a reply to: jadedANDcynical

In Jim Carey's voice

"I like it alot!"

Q is that you?

Lol. Nice story.

P

a reply to: RoryRahl23



a reply to: pheonix358

I will neither confirm nor deny the veracity of that question...


Glad you liked the story.

a reply to: RoryRahl23

I'm curious as well about Lumenari's mother tongue, her writing does not have the feel of someone to whom English is not native.

a reply to: jadedANDcynical

Bang on! Now we are all going to be wondering if OMNI is out there, slipping silently through the ether like one of the old gods.

a reply to: SprocketUK

Glad you enjoyed it, and yes I wonder what OMNI might be getting up to...

originally posted by: jadedANDcynical
a reply to: RoryRahl23

I'm curious as well about Lumenari's mother tongue, her writing does not have the feel of someone to whom English is not native.

Well hell.

I started with Swedish, grew up speaking Cherokee. I was taught Hopi, then mom got the grand idea to teach me Spanish, English, German and French at the same time.

So I'm OK with the spoken languages of a few of those (not too much French, German or Spanish anymore) but my written languages were a mess for me for a long time.

I speak a Cherokee dialect when I am at home.

So when I say I am learning English I am saying that because although I know the words, sentence structure is an issue with me and for the life of me I would like some solid rules for the written language, besides things like I after E except after C except for some words that don't apply and weigh but it's not a law but kind of a suggestion.

It's still a bit confusing for me and I tend to just write stream of consciousness in English, which ends up me shotgunning commas everywhere and being really good at an incomplete sentence.

Hope that helped..

In my family of walking ph#$%ing Rosetta stones, I'm the stupid one.

a reply to: Lumenari

It's still a bit confusing for me and I tend to just write stream of consciousness in English, which ends up me shotgunning commas everywhere and being really good at an incomplete sentence.

Try Poetry

half a thought
that you've been taught
if it should glide
they let it ride

rhymes are cool
for only a fool
will dare to say
it's not clear as day.

-- for Lumenari, because commas --

originally posted by: pthena
a reply to: Lumenari

It's still a bit confusing for me and I tend to just write stream of consciousness in English, which ends up me shotgunning commas everywhere and being really good at an incomplete sentence.

Try Poetry

half a thought
that you've been taught
seems to glide
they let it ride

rhymes are cool
for only a fool
will dare to say
it's not clear as day.

-- for Lumenari, because commas --

I love poetry
It just makes sense to me
No commas or punctuation
To interfere with literation

The challenge of a short story
was what was given to me
So here I am doing my best
To compete in this contest

I thank you Sir for your suggestion
But my poetry was not in question

a reply to: Lumenari


That saves me from telling the story of transition from prose to poetry. relief.

a reply to: Lumenari

To learn any language, read books, lots of books, in the appropriate language of course.

Syntax and structure you will learn, whilst enjoying yourself.

P

originally posted by: pheonix358
a reply to: Lumenari

To learn any language, read books, lots of books, in the appropriate language of course.

Syntax and structure you will learn, whilst enjoying yourself.

P

My father once told me that my curse was that I was mentally gifted and linguistically challenged.

I'm going to write someday.

I'm going to do it well.

People like you are going to help me.

ATS isn't just a conspiracy/political/news site for me.

It's a family.

All dysfunctional and crazy, just like my real family is.

But here I can at least get honest criticism.

a reply to: jadedANDcynical

Loved it , no one died unlike my effort where everyone does.

a reply to: Lumenari
and
a reply to: Lumenari

For a polyglot, you seem to have a lot less trouble with the English language than many I know who were born to it.

Other than English, I know a tiny amount of Spanish; what I call, "kitchen Spanish," learned over years working as a restaurant manager.

Back when I went to school, sentence diagramming was still a thing, and so I suppose that might be why I am able to convey in written form cohesive ideas. As weird and convoluted the English language is, it does have some basic principles which allow for logical structure.

Maybe this will help, maybe it will only further confuse you, but this is what sentence diagramming is:

Diagramming Sentences



a reply to: hutch622

Just read through yours, yeah a bit bleak. Put me in mind of, "On the Beach."

a reply to: jadedANDcynical

I hesitated replying to this because this thread should be all about your rather excellent take on the theme and have nothing to do really about me...

But I was just fielding questions as they came and they were here... I'm sorry.

Thanks for the link and it's something I think I need to work on so I'll parse it.

a reply to: Lumenari

Oh, it's ok. At this point I consider this the after party party, we are close enough to the end of the voting period that I odn't think it will make a lot of difference one way or the other.

Besides, all these posts help bump the thread making it more visible to those who might not have read it just yet.

Nicely done jaded,
I just wanted to let you know that I read your entry and enjoyed it very much.
G

a reply to: Gordi The Drummer

I appreciate that!

I had a lot of fun writing it and was happy to address the topic as I mentioned previously that I have had the idea bouncing around my head for a bit but lacking sufficient motivation had not put words to it.