new story!

hi im new to writing short stories here so tell me what you think of my opening line for my first paragraph

it was a cold but clear night on the night
that this life changing event happend for
jack adams...

...jack was a black haired all american boy
who like any in their teens wanted to party
so he took out the trash and began to make
a series of events that would change his life.

Every story has to start somewhere. The important thing is that you've begun. Once you've got your first thousand words or so you'll see how you can make it better.

I'm of the school of thought that there is no good writing, only good rewriting. I read somewhere that Pappa Hemmingway himself said his words didn't begin to sing until his 11th rewrite.

When you have as little natural talent as I do, words like that tend to ring a bell

Than again, I'm sure that there are some natural wordsmiths out there that don't need to rewrite, just as there are natural piano players or natural ball players. I wish I were one of them. Anyway,

Good start. Where are you going to take it from here?

Wupy

well not to give to much away but he get abducted (no not by aliens) by a storm heh and goes missing for 10 years