Philosophy Continuum

I shared a poem I wrote last week. Even though I'm vocally and all together musically challenged, I decided to record myself reciting my custom poem while also playing my uke. It's not exactly creative brilliance or American Idol but I'm curious to know the response to the philosophy I present in the poem rather then the quality of the music.

Lyrics(the poem I wrote):
The Trial - A Dark Night

You came for a challenge you came for a fight
You came to understand the golden light
You came to live and you came to learn
You came even though you knew your soul would turn

You knew a lesson was to be tought
You knew a great fight was to be fought
You knew you would forget
You also knew you would submit

You can only learn what you do not know
You can only learn or you will not grow
You can only learn through a great plight
You can only learn the day through the night

So everyone realize we share the same goal
Yes I realize it can take a toll
See what's true and see what's right
See through your hatred and get through this dark night.

-Epirus

Originally posted by Smokinmirrors
wow....even my into was taken from me. I worked real hard on that. The tptb always win. I am sad all the time and then this happens. Thanks mods.

Huh?

reply to post by Smokinmirrors


theres a fine line between sharing yoru music... and advertising.

Apparently youve crossed it.....

reply to post by Epirus


I like the philosophy, I live by it honestly, but to be honest, you have to be blind not to see that adversity breeds strength. Well, it does so long as it doesn't break an individual. Any weight lifter can tell you that challenging yourself brings on results.

My advice, as one writer to another, flesh your own ideas a bit more. Find the ones that ones that are hard to put into words, then do it. Carry out the idea described in your poem above, basically.

Originally posted by Wertdagf
reply to post by Smokinmirrors

 

theres a fine line between sharing yoru music... and advertising.

Apparently youve crossed it.....

Just out of curiosity, what is the OP advertising? I'd love to know where you're coming from. I'm guessing you're not too bright but I'd love for you to prove me wrong. Where's the ad..what's he selling? The OP isn't going to be the next American Idol so I don't think he's trying to sell and album based on ATS views...or am I missing something?

Originally posted by RatoAstuto
reply to post by Epirus

 

I like the philosophy, I live by it honestly, but to be honest, you have to be blind not to see that adversity breeds strength. Well, it does so long as it doesn't break an individual. Any weight lifter can tell you that challenging yourself brings on results.

My advice, as one writer to another, flesh your own ideas a bit more. Find the ones that ones that are hard to put into words, then do it. Carry out the idea described in your poem above, basically.

I respect that, thanks for the advice...still learning here. We aren't all instant genius Shakespeare's such as yourself..we bow to thee ooooh great one...ohm...

reply to post by Epirus


Lol, riiight. I ain't no Shakespeare pard. Never plagiarized in my life

Originally posted by RatoAstuto
reply to post by Epirus

 

Lol, riiight. I ain't no Shakespeare pard. Never plagiarized in my life

No one implied that...reading comprehension is your friend...I was saying not everyone is a great writer but everyone has to start somewhere(aka I'm just a beginner with my writing). Instead you attempt to see an attack and misplace the message completely which 100% validates my poem. Wow...I suppose ignorance is bliss...carry on.

why didnt u write another thing in the light of knowing what u r expecting from?

u got a lot of reactions already to that kind of personnal rhymes creation in the chit chat forum how did it become suddenly philosophical subject when u didnt even add to it a sentence ?

to me it is clear that u suddenly draw some conclusions after seeing reactions to, why dont u share those conclusions instead of posting it again as new

why do u enjoy keeping things to urself nothing?? put all out and keep urself value

Originally posted by absolutely
why didnt u write another thing in the light of knowing what u r expecting from?

u got a lot of reactions already to that kind of personnal rhymes creation in the chit chat forum how did it become suddenly philosophical subject when u didnt even add to it a sentence ?

to me it is clear that u suddenly draw some conclusions after seeing reactions to, why dont u share those conclusions instead of posting it again as new

why do u enjoy keeping things to urself nothing?? put all out and keep urself value

There's a huge difference between hearing someone portray their message and reading the message. I don't expect you to understand though. Your posts don't make any sense on any of my threads. You have over 1400 posts and under 200 stars. I think you should think more before you post.

Originally posted by Epirus

There's a huge difference between hearing someone portray their message and reading the message. I don't expect you to understand though. Your posts don't make any sense on any of my threads. You have over 1400 posts and under 200 stars. I think you should think more before you post.

edit on 31-3-2012 by Epirus because: (no reason given)

so u r writing here for giving a message>?? why dont u write on some stones when u mean giving such value to ur poem, instead of repeating the post in different thread
or wait, it is the stars that u expect here, u want to b published i presume, for wat?? oh the message yeah
so u think before u post to achieve some goals, very creative really, maybe u should start to think quit thinking for others and look after urself glamour life

sorry i have no connection to that at all, i simply asked u a question and u reject it in pervert way, i have no message so dont mean it as an argument to say smthg to someone else
oh maybe unconsciously that is the message, no message

reply to post by Epirus


Wow, talk about hostility. I wasn't saying you had purposely insulted me, dude, I was just making a joke, hence the smiley face. My mistake, for assuming that Shakespeare's plagiarism was common knowledge in the writing community.

Cool your jets, junior.

Originally posted by Debwe

Originally posted by Wertdagf
reply to post by Smokinmirrors

 

theres a fine line between sharing yoru music... and advertising.

Apparently youve crossed it.....

Just out of curiosity, what is the OP advertising? I'd love to know where you're coming from. I'm guessing you're not too bright but I'd love for you to prove me wrong. Where's the ad..what's he selling? The OP isn't going to be the next American Idol so I don't think he's trying to sell and album based on ATS views...or am I missing something?

edit on 31-3-2012 by Debwe because: (no reason given)

You are guesing the person your asking a question off is none to bright..Therfore your demeabing him or her .Suggesting there dim stupid.Not a brainiac like you. This may be true or false .But manners an politics are not your forte.Someone asked me a question with the prefx I think your stupid. Not only would I not answer there question .Id feel pity for a fellow human who is to thoughtless to realises assumptions about strangers wether true or false can hurt the object of your scorn.Me I dont care if you think Im MORON.bUT SOME PEOPLE ARE SENSITIVE SOULS..And as my Mother always told me.If you cant think of something nice to say to say to someone.Then remain silent.....PS I love you.

Originally posted by RatoAstuto
reply to post by Epirus

 

Wow, talk about hostility. I wasn't saying you had purposely insulted me, dude, I was just making a joke, hence the smiley face. My mistake, for assuming that Shakespeare's plagiarism was common knowledge in the writing community.

Cool your jets, junior.

Not really a junior(although I wish I could use that excuse for my previous foolish reply). I was for sure wrong in my reply to you. I'm not in a great place so some lower parts of character have been popping up. I'm sorry about my comment. I was 100% off base and I apologize.

reply to post by Epirus


Wow, now that caught me off guard. An apology? On the internet of all places?

Well, thank you, sir.