SSSC "Darkness Hold Me"

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Many Thanks Angel...

How did I miss this one? Intriguing and captive. Kept me glued to my seat until the end! How could anyone ever forget a loved one just disappearing into thin air? Something I would take to my grave...I'm afraid.
I just read some true stories on the internet, about people just disappearing into thin air.

There was snow on the ground and a man had to go out to the well to get some water. After awhile his family was wondering what's taking him so long. When they went to check on him the only thing they found were his footprints leading half way to the well. Nothing else. He just vanished without a trace!

Another one.........

There were several prisoners on a chain gang. They had on leg shackles connected to the chain. One of the middle prisoners just started fading away until he disappeared according to the eye witnesse's. The only things left were his empty leg shackles!

Another Great story AD. Don't let me miss part two ok?

If there is a part two..it will be in a parallel world.
Thanx. AD

I just got done with yours AD Very cool and creepy to say the least./ Probably more Halloween than mine hehehe...

Love it!!

Flag and star for you too my dear!

[edit on 16/10/2007 by shearder]

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Thanks Shearder.My first attempt at a story in 20 years.Guess I needed to think about it for awhile huh?

Originally posted by AccessDenied
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Thanks Shearder.My first attempt at a story in 20 years.Guess I needed to think about it for awhile huh?

Well a very good attempt for sure. Well Shadows was my first since school, and Platform 19 the second. The last i wrote a storyu was probably 23 years ago

I had a hard time reading this story. Mostly due to the formatting.

Why don't you space the paragraphs and seperate the punctuation?

I'm going to read it again though, even though the formating makes it a little more difficult and distracts from the work.

From the comments, I'm expecting to be able to follow the story a little better than the first time through and hopefully enjoy it as much as others have

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Sorry you were disappointed.

reply to post by AccessDenied

I thought it was a very good story



[edit on 22-10-2007 by Enrikez]

[edit on 22-10-2007 by Enrikez]

Sorry, nothing to see here.

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How could I not be upset,when you just completely dissected my story for all to see?
If you can't say anything nice don't say anything at all.
That was my first attempt at writing in 20 years, if you had read the comments you would know that.
Thanks for shooting down my self esteem totally.

Access my dear friend,

I wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed your story.

BRAVO!!!

I know you worked very hard on it, and you deserve a big hug!

After 20 years of not writing?!?! GOOD GOING GIRL!

YOU received points in the last while because of your wonderful poems/etc.. Don't ever forget that. People gave you points because YOU deserved it...earned it honestly. Obviously people thought highly of your penmanship? And so do I.

Now wear that badge with pride, keep writing, and take things in stride hon.

Your quacked up friend,

~Ducky~

reply to post by AccessDenied


Jeez, you know what, I'm really sorry.

I didn't think I was hurting your feelings. Maybe there is some way I can make it up to you in the future? The last thing I wanted to do was embarrass you or make you feel bad. I tried to edit out my comments, but it won't let me anymore. I seriously would if I could and if the mods would let me I will remove them immediately.

If it is any consolation, I did reread your story and thought that you nailed the atmosphere and gave me a shiver that ran up my spine when I read the part about it being based on a real case.

I thought your writing flowed very well and that the 360 degree turn around from the dream to the events at the end was really well done.

It probably doesn't mean much now, but I'll be more careful with my comments from now on. Sorry that I upset you.

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Thank you Ducky.
Hope your book is coming along!

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flagged & starred!

My book is coming along....slowly albeit, but progressing nonetheless.

reply to post by TheDuckster


Yeah! Glad to hear it. I'm reserving a copy now, before the rush...OK?
When it makes the best seller list, I want to brag that I got dibs on one of the first copies!

Oops! I put the right comment on the wrong story! Ok so it matters not because I loved both stories so much, but this one really touched me deeply.

Happy Halloween my friend!

Congratulations!!!! Great Story. I believe that by connecting a real event with the paranormal you really managed to instill that spooky, frightful, scary feeling into the reader. Again nicely done.

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Great storys, Talent and luck what more do you need.

I enjoyed them a lot thanks

Thank you everyone, for all the wonderful comments on my story.The true event that was my inspiration has haunted me always.So many people go missing every year, with very little explaination.
Some say aliens, some say time warps or black holes, who knows what else.
I would prefer to think that we all at some point go back to the oneness and the nothing that we all come from in the first place.