The piss hadn't yet dried from his fingertips as he reached into his can of dip...
tingling spiders of fear creeping up his scalp - frozen, he crouched in position.
He could, and he would wait all night if necessary;
A cold spike as he saw it - another as it saw him.
I learned something new, curiosity made me look up Eidolic...lol
noun. The definition of an eidolic is something or someone who is ideal and perfect, or something that doesn't exist. An example of an eidolic is a
single person's ideal mate; an eidolic mate.
A minor shock in the first words to focus the reader, the sense that the person was capable for the battle ahead, the rush of adrenaline at the
end....
While never describing the antagonist at all, but leaving it to the reader's imagination.