posted on Jun, 27 2017 @ 12:13 PM
I thought it was interesting, and you are clearly on an upward learning curve (as you yourself suggest).
I found the video difficult to follow, a combination of faltering delivery and poor sound quality. But I think the delivery issue is a side-effect of
your spontaneity, and this could be mediated by the preparation of 'talking points' (i.e., a list of topics you want to cover, which would hold your
presentation together in a tighter way, without actually being a script).
Addressing this would help make your videos a bit shorter, which would aid with viewer retention.
Until you get the sound recording issue sorted, I endorse the suggestion of some form of subtitling.
Visually, my instinctive reaction is that the setting is gloomy and monotonous, which contrasts unhelpfully with the positivity of what you are
saying. Go out and try recording some video in the sunshine, perhaps just plonk yourself on a park bench and do it 'selfie style'. I think this change
of scenery would be more welcoming to the viewer and would probably produce a more upbeat delivery.
As for content, I'm not really your target audience so can't say anything useful either way.
Onward and upward.