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posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:33 PM
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Blackness coils around my center
gravity pulls me down
screams from beyond bid me enter
these waves are going to make me drown

through the night I slash with my knife
ripping through velvet sky
unsure as I question my life
always asking "why?"

universe bigger than we can know
but it exists in me
forever it'll grow
only existing where I can see

so banish hate, banish lies
I don't want it anymore
hold up love and hold the skies
now is time to settle the score

creeping through destiny
the snake hisses my name
trapped here, presently
want to be heard without fame

but the spiral continues to pull
nothing ever escaped
soon I shall make it full
and my consciousness raped

for light, I hope
but will it ever reach me?
wishing is how I cope
knowing I'll never be free

but so long as infinity reigns
maybe I'll break from my chains
as long as there's a chance I'll be free
despair will never take me



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:36 PM
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a reply to: polyath
Nice job. Interesting rhyme setup. May I just let you know that posts mean sharing rights with TAN(ATS and associated network).


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Sorry if a little off topic, but your title made me want to let you know. If you want I'll delete the long portion.
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posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:41 PM
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Why is poetry so depressing..
Maybe that's the point, I'm guessing..
Trying to make everything rhyme..
Why the f*** am I wasting my time..
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posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:43 PM
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a reply to: Misterlondon

Aye, depressing poetry often be
into our inner souls it lets us see
but fear not, not everything I write will be sappy
perhaps the next one will even be happy



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:46 PM
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a reply to: Tiamat384

Oh, I didn't know that ...so basically the admins can take the credit for work done by us. Meh...that's fine. I posted it to share, not make money. Though, it would be cool if I were credited if it ever got famous.

Now translating...that's my profession, so that's not something I'll do for free (well, unless I have free time to volunteer and it's for a good cause


Yeah, go ahead and delete the long version of the title if you want.



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:48 PM
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a reply to: polyath
No. You have rights to it, but not exclusive. I just wanted to let you know. Keep sharing
I don't know about you, but there would be no purpose for me to write if I did not share it with people. I meant delete my post(the content regarding rights).



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:50 PM
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a reply to: Tiamat384

Nah, keep it. It may be good info for someone else who stumbles through this thread.

The poem's probably a bit dark since I have Tool's Aenima album playing in my head right now.



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:51 PM
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a reply to: polyath
There are two topics of poetry really. It is either bound to be dark and gloomy or of love for a loved one. Seems most common anyways.



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:55 PM
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a reply to: Tiamat384

Yeah. I've noticed my poems tend to be dark, but hopeful.



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:57 PM
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a reply to: polyath
I like writing love stories, dark romance, and topics of death and the like often times I speak of myself through what I write. It is a subtle way of saying what one holds deep inside. Hm, but hope. I never end with hope.



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:58 PM
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Some of the best poems can be depressing ones. They are a reflection of one of many emotions and can be wonderfully expressed. I enjoyed this!



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 04:59 PM
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a reply to: Night Star

If you liked it, where's my star and flag?

Just kidding! Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll be getting around to reading everyone else's stuff in the very near future.



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 05:04 PM
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a reply to: polyath

It's a feeling of love that you let out,
It's a feeling of out soul crying out,
It's a feeling of our burning passion,
It's a feeling of craziness inside our head,
It's love that we all take in!

Nice writing!



posted on May, 6 2016 @ 05:30 PM
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originally posted by: polyath
a reply to: Night Star

If you liked it, where's my star and flag?

Just kidding! Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll be getting around to reading everyone else's stuff in the very near future.


I gave you a star and flag before coming back to post a reply. They are there.

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