The Backroom- Short Story

I havn't written a short story in awhile so feedback is always appreciated. Hopefully I have improved since the last time I wrote one.

Unfortunately i cannot copy and paste it in here as the character limit is to low, but here is a link to it on Booksie:

The Backroom

Note: this is a horror story so as you will find out on the link

a reply to: golden23

i was taken into your story right away and you kept me captured all the way. that's what i like when i read something. you'll get the hang of writing with heaps and heaps of practice and reading. i enjoyed your story, keep going!