Untethered - YSM2023, page 1

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 02:37 PM

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You Spin Me
Out of control,
Untethered, I tumble.

Seductively, you gaze,
Pirouetting my heart.
Intimately, you whisper,
Naked, I capitulate.

Mercy, I implore!
Eternally, I'm yours.

The End

SprocketUK

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 03:19 PM

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a reply to: Encia22

I like what you did there

nugget1

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 04:03 PM

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a reply to: Encia22

Very nice, Encia!

JJproductions

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 05:48 PM

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a reply to: Encia22

Love it!

pthena

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 07:52 PM

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a reply to: Encia22

I think my eyes are going.
I had to squint to see it.

The picture was distracting.

Encia22

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 08:57 PM

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a reply to: SprocketUK

Thanks, SprocketUK, yes, it's a particular way of writing, spelling out the theme, line by line. It's the only way I can get close to writing poetry.

Encia22

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 09:00 PM

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a reply to: JJproductions

I'm happy you enjoyed it, JJ. You have inspired me to attempt such works.

Encia22

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 09:01 PM

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a reply to: nugget1

I always appreciate your feedback, nugget1, it means a lot.

Encia22

posted on Aug, 8 2023 @ 09:05 PM

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a reply to: pthena

LOL, pthena, my eyesight has already gone. And yes, the picture is a bit overkill. I work on a dimly lit smartphone, so I forget images may be more saturated when viewed by others. Unfortunately, it's too late for me to edit.

edit on 8/8/2023 by Encia22 because: (no reason given)