Standing Stones

A little rhyme to pass the time.

Standing Stones

Long ago those giants of men
Feign purpose far beyond our ken
With hewn might and wizard lore
Enchanted stone from distant shore
And measured out with silver cord
An arcane knowledge of the stars
And set them down on hallowed hill
In sylvan wood and sacred grove

And timeless days of mystery
And seasons running wild and free
And fallow fields long overgrown
Were tethered to the rings of stone
And some like silent sentinels
Hold secrets they can never tell
Reminders of that golden age
And memories of childhood days

a reply to: midicon

Beautiful my brother, S+F.

a reply to: Agleaya

Thanks Aleaya, you are very kind!

a reply to: midicon

You too!

a reply to: midicon

This is excellent! S/F!

a reply to: JJproductions

Thanks JJ, I really wasn't sure about posting it but it does no harm.

I write little rhymes which at the time seem neat but then the next day I think maybe it wasn't such a good idea lol.

Thanks again my friend!

Enchanted stone from distant shore
And measured out with silver cord
An arcane knowledge of the stars

a reply to: midicon

I really like this part! Thank you for posting this!

a reply to: midicon

Beautiful Midicon you are a true wordsmith

a reply to: stonerwilliam

That is a great compliment William!

Thank you for saying that!

a reply to: midicon

You are more than welcome

a reply to: midicon

Really nice. The narrative was clear and complex, the structure and initial rhyme was strong, but it never seemed forced to fit the rhyme or structure.

And breaking the rhyme in the later parts of each stanza when the narrative takes over was a good decision.

originally posted by: chr0naut
a reply to: midicon

Really nice. The narrative was clear and complex, the structure and initial rhyme was strong, but it never seemed forced to fit the rhyme or structure.

And breaking the rhyme in the later parts of each stanza when the narrative takes over was a good decision.

I did break the rhyme but wanted to keep those words. It did still seem to flow along.

The poem was really just the first eight lines but then I thought it too short and added another four. Then I thought it wasn't balanced and added another four!

I liked the idea of using the standing stones as markers of our transtion from hunter gatherers in a loose way. Taming the seasons sort of. I also love some of the words I try to include that set a mood.

I do try but you would probably make a better fist of it than me!

Thanks chrOnaut, for taking the time to read and break that down. Also for saying something nice!